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« on: May 14, 2014, 04:42:14 PM »

Hey guys. Here is my last short: (BRACKETS)



It's an extended shot we produced in 2 hours of shooting with ultra minimal crew. The comedian worked a lot a great coach before the shooting.
Music by "about:" www.aboutband.com

https://vimeo.com/95247765

Like always, it's in french. So don't forget to click on the "CC" button on the player to get the subtitles. Those subtitles may be full of shit because we did them very quickly tonight... so if you notice any mistake, mistranslated sentences or stuff that could be more "english", please, please, pretty please, let me know.

Apart from that, what do you think?

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« Reply #1 on: May 15, 2014, 07:48:58 AM »

Sorry, when I select the English subs they don't come up. Maybe it's a problem with Vimeo.

As a piece done in a single take, it looks pretty good. The camera seems to move at the right times, and the actor is certainly very good about hitting his marks.  Afro

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« Reply #2 on: May 15, 2014, 07:54:10 AM »

Did you try with another browser?

Thanks for the comment!

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« Reply #3 on: May 15, 2014, 10:35:55 AM »

Yeah, thanks, I was able to get them to come up in Chrome.

Generally, your English seems all right, although occasionally I can't quite get what is being said. I assume that "Lay your hand on my sex" is supposed to be a bit odd, hence the girl's laughter. I don't understand "holding the yoke of a cardboard plane" or "we are not necessarily going to sign Picasso."

Probably "I like the risk of loosing everything" is wrong. I think you mean "losing" instead of "loosing", unless you intend to mean unleashing.

That's just what jumped out at me on a first pass. I may take another look and see if I spot anything else.

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« Reply #4 on: May 15, 2014, 01:53:56 PM »

Thanks! I'm changing the "losing".

"we are not necessarily going to sign Picasso." => the idea is that if they have sex, it won't be that great: it won't be a masterpiece. It won't be a Picasso, so they won't write "Picasso" on the act. I know it's very metaphorical, but how would you say it?

"holding the yoke of a cardboard plane" => another image. What if I change "holding" to "taking"? And of course, a "cardboard plane", to me, is this:


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« Reply #5 on: May 15, 2014, 02:07:56 PM »

to sign Picasso  = to hire Picasso

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« Reply #6 on: May 15, 2014, 02:31:40 PM »

Oh ok. My mistake. How do you say when a painter puts his name at the bottom of his painting? To credit?

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« Reply #7 on: May 16, 2014, 04:45:04 AM »

I have updated the subtitles file. I think I've fixed the problems you mentioned. What do you guys think?

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« Reply #8 on: May 16, 2014, 05:04:54 AM »

OK, it seems like your changes work. The Picasso line is OK now; if you wanted to get closer to what (I think) you were intending you could do something like "so it won't be a masterpiece--we don't have to sign Picasso's name to it." But at this point you probably don't want to make any more changes . . .

Btw, that actress, beside being really cute, is sure good at making herself laugh. Is that a specialty of hers?

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« Reply #9 on: May 16, 2014, 05:11:48 AM »

I'm ready to make any change, it's actually pretty quick. Almost real time. It's just a text file I modify and upload (a few Ko, nothing more). Cool new function on Vimeo, it's just a shame that it doesn't work with all the browsers! It doesn't work on my iOS devices either.

Thanks for the line, I'm changing it right now.

BTW, Stanton, could you please send me your real name for the credits? You'll both be credited at the end of the subtitles (if you like so).

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« Reply #10 on: May 16, 2014, 05:22:25 AM »

I haven't done anything ...
(unless I wrote the screenplay in a dream of yours)

Not even praised the film yet Wink

What I already noticed in your earlier films is that you are pretty good with actors.

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« Reply #11 on: May 16, 2014, 05:32:52 AM »

Haha you're helping here so you're taking part!

Thanks man. I try not to fall into the same trap as many young directors: staying with the camera crew on set and staying away from the actors. Another thing is that I spend a lot of time in post production trying to get the best out of their performance: speeding up or down a couple frames here and there to remove or add a pause between 2 sentences, digitally removing blinks... It's just little things so it won't drastically change the performance but it allows me to chose the most interesting takes (instead of the least flawed) and then remove the technical flaws.

Anyway, the main thing is that the more I know about what I'm expecting from my actors the better I am at directing them. It sounds stupid but in the end that's a key we tend to forget when preparing a shooting.

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